Hi,Despite my prior post i’ve called this one 5.1 as the changes are minimal. One significant elements amended though provided by one line added. I’ve suggested class (which is defined by wealth) division between Jim and Lucy.Some other similar minimalist bits and pieces of lines, switched or excised.Submitting for 9am on Friday and prepping a shoot for later today and tomorrow pm. carcass draft5.1
Here’s the latest draft. This is a version rather than a draft but i’ve gotten into calling them drafts now so i’ll continue. Tightening of dialogue, pushing subtext mainly through visual language carcass draft 5 i’ve included scene numbers though this isn’t a sign that this has gone into production but a sign that I would be happy for this version to go into production and into rehearsal for the actors to create a new draft that is their own .